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Merry-Go-Round by ~hippy-chick:iconhippy-chick:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open


Merry-Go-Round

I can't escape,
Why wont it stop,
Whirling in terror
Forevermore:
No way out.

Life has dealt me
A poor hand,
I'm trapped inside my
Head, always spinning:
No way out.

Stop the world,
I want to get off,
Free from the rat race
That holds me prisoner:
No way out.

My life constantly
Turning, always swirling,
I feel lost and confused,
Nothing to stop me falling:
No way out.

Never learning,
Never growing,
Held captive by
My ignorance:
No way out.

Not developing
As a person,
Instead I rot
In bitter stagnation:
No way out.

This relentless
Merry-Go-Round
That is my life,
It's time to stop it...
I found my way out.
©2005-2009 ~hippy-chick
:iconhippy-chick:

Author's Comments

Hmmmmmmm quite dark this one...ahhh well it doesn't reflect my feelings or the feelings of anyone i know in any way. Its one of those things that jst came to me. The phrase merry-go-round randomly entered my head and then the rest of the poem just developed from there.

comments very welcome :)
enjoy :heart:

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:iconmiss-meg:
~Miss-Meg Jun 4, 2005, 1:23:45 PM
Ooh very nice! I love the structure of this...aswell as the actual poem ;p

Very very good m'dear. :D

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:heart:
:iconhippy-chick:
~hippy-chick Jun 4, 2005, 2:20:28 PM
thanks alot! :hug: :D

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:peace: PEACE :icq: AND :kiss: LOVE :heart: SPEAK THE TRUTH :star: :flowerpot: :butterflytwo:
:icondesignerfreak:
~DesignerFreak Jun 4, 2005, 2:24:58 PM
you're right it is dark... and it flows really well, i found that when i was reading it, it seemed to be really quick and upbeat
:iconfree-bird:
~Free-Bird Jun 4, 2005, 2:35:23 PM
My life constantly
Turning, always swirling,
I feel lost and confused,
Nothing to stop me falling:
No way out.

i simply love this stanza in particular, a fave methinks!

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take a whiff on me take a whiff on me
everybody take a whiff on me
i said a hey
hey
baby take a whiff on me
:iconfool-on-the-hill:
~Fool-On-The-Hill Jun 5, 2005, 3:10:45 AM
really good rythm and structure, and a lot of the language is truly great! really vivid imagery too, nice work hun! :hug:

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"Does the body rule the mind or does the mind rule the body- I dunno..." -Morrissey
:iconhippy-chick:
~hippy-chick Jun 5, 2005, 9:56:24 AM
thanks alot sweetheart! :D :date:

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:peace: PEACE :icq: AND :kiss: LOVE :heart: SPEAK THE TRUTH :star: :flowerpot: :butterflytwo:
:iconhippy-chick:
~hippy-chick Jun 5, 2005, 10:08:52 AM
awww yay! thanks alot man! :hug: :D

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:peace: PEACE :icq: AND :kiss: LOVE :heart: SPEAK THE TRUTH :star: :flowerpot: :butterflytwo:
:iconhippy-chick:
~hippy-chick Jun 5, 2005, 10:28:13 AM
oh good cos that was what in was aiming for! :w00t:

and danke shon mon amie :hug:

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:peace: PEACE :icq: AND :kiss: LOVE :heart: SPEAK THE TRUTH :star: :flowerpot: :butterflytwo:
:iconfool-on-the-hill:
~Fool-On-The-Hill Jun 6, 2005, 6:33:08 AM
you're very welcome sweetheart :D

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"Does the body rule the mind or does the mind rule the body- I dunno..." -Morrissey
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